Black Ghost

“She’s always talking about church and crap!” Paul said exasperatedly. Start the story from here, like Ares said. You should always start with action, not an infodump for half a ...

7/10 bit of an ego?

Interesting story, Shadowtwit. :D Technical-wise, it's very sound, so I'll just delve into the structure. The crowd pushed forward, and Mary Jane staggered, her crippled legs giving way; another shove

The pictures seem so lifelike. And I don't think it's creepy at all...they're just dolls. :?

O.o Thanks for catching that. I missed a very important piece of dialogue. The devil is supposed to tell him that he will come after three years to take his ...

Ah, one sentence like the one you added is enough. As long as you have some kind of hook, it makes it better. Hope that helps, Tony

Such a disturbing story...yet awesome at the same time. Perfect example of Quiet Horror XD.

I would suggest at least hinting at a conlfict in this...just to keep the reader interested.

I actually a good dose of television can be helpful. For example, whenever I watch television I always mentally break down elements of plot that I notice, and it helps ...

Chop! Joseph’s axe came down upon the lowly stump, cutting the piece of wood cleanly in two. Both pieces fell to the forest floor, making a thud against the dirt ...

9/10 It's actually a really nice pose.

Hardback. I just love the jackets.

Thanks so much for all the feedback. :D I'm in the process of rewriting the prologue and working on finishing the first draft, so I'll keep in mind everything that ...

Aren't critters furry animals? I was under the impression that we critique. XD

CCF is being mocked as we speak...